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I glance around my room:

It's covered in a thin layer of dust
Soft and gray, like old snow,
Or like wet newspapers
carrying the words of yesterdays.

I start cleaning:

Gathering all the dust into balls
The cracks on the pure white wall
Become shockingly clear
Filled with raincloud lies.

I take out the trash:

The sun is dazzling
Too depressingly warm
For all these layers defending
Against no thunderstorm.

Some allergies even cleaning won't alleviate:

I touch a dry patch
Of paint, coming off the wall,
Of pain, leaking from
the cold metal pipes.

I sneeze. God bless me.
Spring is coming. Spring is near. Can you hear it calling?

"Wake up," it says. "Wake up."
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wildicebell Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
^ ^ aaaww
we all thought spring is coming too. it has been raining for a while now.

but just today, it snowed here again. whenever it snows late like this, I would think that winter is reluctant to leave. and want to show her beauty to us one last time so we won't forget her.
I'm usually not a fan when it snows, but knowing spring is coming, snow seemed more gentle and beautiful than usual. even when its so cold and the wind is so strong that it hurts a bit. when I think it's just winter trying hard to catch our attention (like a little kid), it's kinda cute.

have you decided on college yet? if you are coming to the east coast, you won't have too many of those warm and sunny days.
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littlecloudflower Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, that's such a pretty imagery. I kind of want to write a poem about how winter doesn't want to leave now...:P

Not yet. I got into Allegheny and Smith for now, but I'm still waiting on 17 other college acceptance/rejection letters...^^; My top choices are probably Stanford (though I'm probably not going to get in), Pomona, or Swarthmore.
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wildicebell Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
feel free to write about it! it'd be my honor! I was actually thinking of drawing something for it too. maybe once you do, I will too, how about it~ ;D

you know me, I'll forever hope you go to Stanford. even after you didn't get in and choose to go else where, I'll still wish you go to Stanford. hahaha :D

good luck!! >w< if you come join me in east coast you can snuggle with me when it gets too cold. but only after taking the train to get to RISD, lololol. and we all both go to anime boston together <3

aaaaah, you being in college is still.....not hitting me . you are supposed to be really young and forever coughing on spoons when you eat yogurt.....nvm, excuse me.
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Estuari Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
This makes me wonder if you are describing your state of mind using the metaphor of a room. With the coming of spring we should wake from our lives, shed them like chrysalises, and confront our fears so that we can greet the new season and find a new beginning.

(It's only 9:23 PM but I feel as if I have been up until 3 AM. I hope I didn't ramble too much. :) )
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littlecloudflower Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student Writer
"With the coming of spring we should wake from our lives, shed them like chrysalises, and confront our fears so that we can greet the new season and find a new beginning."

Haha you're exactly correct! Yay my metaphor worked! ^^ I was actually thinking of naming it "Spring Cleaning of the Soul" to make it more obvious, then decided that the poem should probably speak for itself.
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wildicebell Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
I'm glad you named it this way. the metaphor definitely came through, but in a subtle way. I think it gives reader a "gut feeling" of what it's about, which I think is the best type.
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littlecloudflower Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student Writer
Haha yay! You approve! ^^

Yeah, I've noticed that sometimes I tend to put a lot of cliches in my poems, but I challenged myself to not use any in this one. Still could be better (not sure if "raincloud lies" or "words of yesterdays" was completely necessary, though not sure how to change it) but it did force me to put more details into it.
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wildicebell Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
aaah, I wouldn't know about the details. as someone who knows little about writing, I can only tell you that "I like the feeling!" hahaha.
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littlecloudflower Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Haha thank you for that! ^^
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Estuari Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
You are right. Your poem definitely speaks for itself.
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littlecloudflower Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student Writer
Haha thank you! That's great to know!
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